December 15th, 2011, 10:00 pm

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Reply day-dream-shteen, December 16th, 2011, 11:35 pm

Grammar corrections I was just wondering if you'd like me to correct your grammar for you? ^_^

Reply Lynnnn, December 18th, 2011, 5:06 am

@day-dream-shteen: this actually will be grat! xD''

Reply day-dream-shteen, December 18th, 2011, 2:29 pm

@Lynnnn: OKAY! :D *lets out her inner editor*

3rd panel, 1st speech bubble: "I was so worried" instead of "worry" ("worry" is present tense, and she was speaking in the past tense)
3rd panel, 2nd speech bubble: "I didn't think you'd ever wake up." or "I thought you'd never wake up." would make a lot more sense.

Also, when she says "You have slept for two days", although there's technically nothing wrong with that, it would be a lot more natural to phrase it as "You've been sleeping for two days" :)

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